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The flashbacks promised a lovey dovey 2 party romance 😭 and yet real time is such a tonal whiplash

Luc was absolutely fridged.... Ash shouldve used Luc to coerce the MC to start off the main plot... Luc's death felt... meaningless. Luc's death was incredibly predictable... 😭 No good boys see a tommorow. 

Jumping between flashbacks and Real time makes the genre and overall tone a bit incoherent with how the flashbacks are warm and welcoming and the real time is just so miserable muted and harsh, idk if the jarring transition between moods was intentional but its giving incohesive mood

The dialogue is super well done, the characters feel real and consistent. Though the lack of grief outside the flashbacks leaves the mental load unto the players and not on the MC, which is a small inaccuracy since the MC is the player's insert, though the MC does comment on the "trajedy", it feels...  a tad bit underwhelming when you think of the severity of the "tragedy".

The "Noise" at the end was very very effective in driving home the mood and tension. Well done, and the vision gimmick was brilliant. Solid 9.7/10 in gameplay, I love that homophobic brown dog.

I feel as if Luc's *cough cough* "Tired legs" flashback was a tad bit longer than it shouldve been, that's subjective but I suggest you trim 1 or 2 lines form the end so it lines with emotional peaks.

Every scene was beautifully crafted with intent and love, which is very very impressive, there was no irrelevant filler, all scenes delivered a point, the pacing is incredibly done and it's a pleasant read.

Just keep track of emotional peaks in dialogue and scene and that's all the advise I could muster up.

Bravo. 9.8/10 in storytelling. Better than 99% of Netflix Remakes, the -0.2 was because

Luc needed a better send off or he shouldntve died whatsoever, I get that it helps add stakes but the MC seemed to far too apathetic. it feels like Luc went from a Love intrest to a Fridge character which is a bit disappointing. Just dont kill Luc, hospitalize him, Give the MC some hope to explain why he hasn't offed himself allready. Luc is his lighthouse afterall, revenge is far fetched and unrealistic in the setting because revenge is a good incentive is good in theory but it's not feasible in the setting. Especially with how Ash described the place.

Hot take : Make saving Luc the goal, and I think it would be a better story imho and that goal would recontextualize the flashbacks greatly imho. Coercion fits Ash quite well. And an overcharging goal keeps players hooked and excited for new updates.

#BringBackLuc

I really enjoy this vn.It got so much potential.

Looking forward to see what's next.

That was far more indepth than I expected, even if short.

Eager to see where it goes. (Do wonder who is the supposed love interest. Volkov, or Theo? Theo had no sprite, but gave me 'cute innocent twink' vibes, so could appeal to Darius as Luc apparently was like that too, twinkish)

I really love how you write the interaction between Darius and Luc. It's phenomenal. Beautiful. I'm hooked with the story now.

I liked it, no clue where it's going. Initially slice of life, then jail break then mutant zombie shooter? Scratch that, after reading the dev blog, i think i know where it's going

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This visual novel is really great! I am thoroughly impressed by what you have been able to do in ren'py. I love the unique mechanics and I am hooked on the game, I'm also very excited to see where the story goes, and the story between Luc and Darius.

Прочитал давно, но комментарий не оставлял, поэтому решил поделиться своим мнением.

Игра интересная, сразу затянула своим сюжетом, механика выборов классно сделана, особенно с цветами. 

Персонаж с русским именем так ещё и гомофоб - это меня позабавило. 😭🙏🏻

You made a great vn, I’m excited to see what’s next!

Another wholesome entry for May Wolf 2025, thank you for your service Erebus 😇

It's been a long time since I enjoyed a vn so much. I loved the characters, the interactive nature of the game, and it left me wanting more. I hope it gets more recognition; it's well worth it.

Did not expect to get hooked up this quick to the story. The flow is quite pleasing to read. Love the interactions the game provides, keeps the reader focused. Characters are also all interesting so far. Excited for what's more in store! 

10/10 The worldbuilding, writing, storytelling, visuals, sound... Can't wait for the post-jam version :3

I  really enjoyed reading this. The visuals are amazing and the overall story is very intriguing. I need me some more Darius x Luc stories. They compliment each other so well and I love their interactions. Amazing job!

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